Peer review on Alphonsus's WA2

I think that paragraph one is a good beginning as you relate the relationship between the depletion in fossil fuels and the increasing demand of energy to the need for the development of Gen IV nuclear reactors. There is one part I believe that the in-text citation was done wrongly and there should be a connector between human history and the fight instead of just a comma. The part is : As the natural fossil fuels run out in the next 10 to 20 years(Graham Jones, 2003), it might become one of the greatest disasters of human history, the fight for energy might lead to wars in the years ahead. The in-text citation (Graham Jones, 2003) should be placed at the end of the sentence. I suggest that you can add in the connector ‘and’ after human history.

For paragraph 2, 3 and 4, you state your counterclaims and rebuttals before the supporting reasons. I believe that it will be much clearer if you place your supporting reasons before your counterclaims and rebuttals. In paragraph 3and 4, the in-text citation (Nature Vol. 429, 2004) is wrong as it should the author surname follow by the year instead of the name of the journal follow by the year. Lastly, more effort should be spent when compiling the reference list. Overall, the essay is well done. =)