Peer review on Eric's WA1

First paragraph is very straight to the point; this allows readers to know exactly what they are expecting for the rest of the essay. The thesis statement is the last statement of the first paragraph – People should see climate change as a problem for both nature and them.

The topic sentence for the second paragraph is nature ecosystem can save lives. The writer puts in a lot of effort to research more based on this idea and add in a lot more examples apart from the sources provided. One example that he stated is the tsunami that swept through Asia in 2004, killing an estimated 300k people. There are also in-text citations to account for the examples he stated.

I think that the writer can further elaborate on the point in paragraph 3. Maybe he can give some examples to support his idea.

For paragraph 4, although the writer stated the examples of Gribbles using enzymes to break down agricultural waste products. He did not add in any in-text citation.

Conclusion is neatly done; the writer summarizes his main points into the last paragraph and ended the essay with the thesis statement. However, the reference list is not done properly. Instead of only putting in the respective websites for the reference, the writer should also add in the author, year, month, day, title of work, retrieved month day.